Tuesday 15 November 2016

day and night Caleb explanation

For reading we have been learning about space and our solar system. We learnt about why we have day and night. Here is my DLO (digital learning object) about why I think we have day and

Thursday 3 November 2016

My taniwha - writing

For the past few weeks I have been practising using our language in my writing. I have been trying to paint pictures with words; I had to invent my own taniwha I drew my own taniwha and then I had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what I had to do  with my taniwha and what my taniwha is like  then I had to read my work to a buddy and they had ago at drawing my taniwha.






 Create and Describe Your Own Creature
(Nogard)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

  • Have a name for your creature
  • Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
  • Describe the shapes
  • Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
  • What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
  • Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
  • What colours is it?
  • Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
  • Keep it simple and clear!
  • Use correct punctuation and spelling.
  • Check that your sentences make sense.


Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  














Create your piece of writing here
*MY  TANiWHA *
Do you know  that I have a secret friend ?  He is shaped like a spiky shark with spikes that cover his back.    His  name is called Stalker. He lives at the bottom of the ocean. He doesn't come out of the ocean/ moana because he can't . But he takes me under water/ wai  and he lets me see  the reef.  He has 7  blue  pointy spheres on  its back. His face is a triangle and he has  big dark eyes. His body is a dark grey. He’s got little blue/kikorangi  speckles  on the end of his  tail and his  head and he has a  MASSIVE fin.  He is  a really  powerful taniwha and he stalks the ocean like a underwater predator.  He's also got  really razor sharp teeth that can bite through steel !  My taniwha is hōhā and does Not like people but he likes me.







Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer:  daneil

What I think you did well: I think you did well at describing what you do with your taniwha.

What I think you could improve on:      Punctuation and checking that your sentences make sense.  

Self Evaluation    

What I think I did well: I think i did well describing my taniwa


What I could improve on:  punctuation











My taniwha - writing

For the past few weeks I have been practising using our language in my writing. I have been trying to paint pictures with words; I had to invent my own taniwha I drew my own taniwha and then I had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what I had to do  with my taniwha and what my taniwha is like  then I had to read my work to a buddy and they had ago at drawing my taniwha.



 Create and Describe Your Own Creature
(Nogard)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

  • Have a name for your creature
  • Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
  • Describe the shapes
  • Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
  • What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
  • Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
  • What colours is it?
  • Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
  • Keep it simple and clear!
  • Use correct punctuation and spelling.
  • Check that your sentences make sense.


Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  














Create your piece of writing here
*MY  TANiWHA *
Do you know  that I have a secret friend ?  He is shaped like a spiky shark with spikes that cover his back.    His  name is called Stalker. He lives at the bottom of the ocean. He doesn't come out of the ocean/ moana because he can't . But he takes me under water/ wai  and he lets me see  the reef.  He has 7  blue  pointy spheres on  its back. His face is a triangle and he has  big dark eyes. His body is a dark grey. He’s got little blue/kikorangi  speckles  on the end of his  tail and his  head and he has a  MASSIVE fin.  He is  a really  powerful taniwha and he stalks the ocean like a underwater predator.  He's also got  really razor sharp teeth that can bite through steel !  My taniwha is hōhā and he do