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Persuasive writing- why do we need pets

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing  about why we should have pets.

Title A Short Statement about pets topic. eg. sho	WHY DO WE NEED PETS
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	Why do we need pets ? we need pets to helps find  out items and  help the police if we didn’t have pets it would be sad and we wouldn’t get fit.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	firstly Police dogs police dogs are super helpful if we didn’t  have them people will get away with crime. lots of cops need help with getting people they also sniff the pockets  so the won’t carry anything banned or anything that is not  allowed into the country.
	secondly Airport dogs help with looking and sniffing out banded items this is a good job for pets and if we didn’t have these pets people could bring banned items into the country we are lucky that we have trained dogs that help us
	thirdly some trained dogs help people with disabilities like blind people.They are trained when they are born they help people get fit and make them happy. I love pets and it would be a shame if  they had to go.
Concluding statement Summing it up.  A summary of your arguments and your view on the topic.

persuasive writing- why should we fix our feld

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing  about why we should fix our field.  

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	Save Our Field !!!!!!!
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	I strongly advise that we need  to get the field back we would not get fit and we need to train for sport and also do  cross country.  Most of the space in our school is used for the feld.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	secondly it is constantly boggy a lot of the time it was out of use. We should make use of all our sports equipment and the money is going to waste we use our money to pay for bus trips camps etc we could fundraise for the field.
	Thirdly we do lots of special events like the hangi but when the field is to wet and damp we can’t do special events on the field we need our field back urgently.
	finally we could make use of all of the sports equipment and most of the money is going to waste a large part of the school is also going to waste.  MAKE OUR FIELD GREAT AGAIN !!! 😃😀😃😀😃😀
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My Marine Mammal Information Report

We have been learning how to write a information  report. Here is my report on a Marine Mammal.

My Sea Week Writing

For Sea Week we wrote about why the ocean is important here is my writing work.Please leave  and kind, positive and thoughtful comment.

My taniwha - writing

For the past few weeks I have been practising using our language in my writing. I have been trying to paint pictures with words; I had to invent my own taniwha I drew my own taniwha and then I had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what I had to do  with my taniwha and what my taniwha is like  then I had to read my work to a buddy and they had ago at drawing my taniwha.

 Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here

*MY  TANiWHA *

Do you know  that I have a secret friend ?  He is shaped like a spiky shark with spikes that cover his back.    His  name is called Stalker. He lives at the bottom of the ocean. He doesn't come out of the ocean/ moana because he can't . But he takes me under water/ wai  and he lets me see  the reef.  He has 7  blue  pointy spheres on  its back. His face is a triangle and he has  big dark eyes. His body is a dark grey. He’s got little blue/kikorangi  speckles  on the end of his  tail and his  head and he has a  MASSIVE fin.  He is  a really  powerful taniwha and he stalks the ocean like a underwater predator.  He's also got  really razor sharp teeth that can bite through steel !  My taniwha is hōhā and does Not like people but he likes me.

Peer Evaluation   Name of Peer:  daneil

What I think you did well: I think you did well at describing what you do with your taniwha.

What I think you could improve on:      Punctuation and checking that your sentences make sense.  

Self Evaluation    

What I think I did well: I think i did well describing my taniwa

What I could improve on:  punctuation

My taniwha - writing

For the past few weeks I have been practising using our language in my writing. I have been trying to paint pictures with words; I had to invent my own taniwha I drew my own taniwha and then I had to write about it and describe what it looks like, what I had to do  with my taniwha and what my taniwha is like  then I had to read my work to a buddy and they had ago at drawing my taniwha.

 Create and Describe Your Own Creature

(Nogard)

WALT: be descriptive in our writing.  

Look at the description of a Nogard.  Now Create and describe your own creature that you will then be able to read to a buddy so that they can draw it.  Your description must be as detailed and clear as possible so that when you share it with others they will be able to visualise and draw you creature. Use lots of adjectives (describing words - big, small, round, green).

You must .....

• Have a name for your creature
• Start from the big things and work your way to the smaller things
• Describe the shapes
• Describe its neck, body, tail, wings etc.
• What does its head look like?Think about its eyes, nose, eyebrows, mouth, teeth
• Describe its legs/flippers/fins etc.
• What colours is it?
• Any extra details on the body like scales, spikes etc.
• Keep it simple and clear!
• Use correct punctuation and spelling.
• Check that your sentences make sense.

Remember that a good writer ‘paints’ pictures in their reader’s head with words.   This is what good descriptive writing does.  

Create your piece of writing here

*MY  TANiWHA *

Do you know  that I have a secret friend ?  He is shaped like a spiky shark with spikes that cover his back.    His  name is called Stalker. He lives at the bottom of the ocean. He doesn't come out of the ocean/ moana because he can't . But he takes me under water/ wai  and he lets me see  the reef.  He has 7  blue  pointy spheres on  its back. His face is a triangle and he has  big dark eyes. His body is a dark grey. He’s got little blue/kikorangi  speckles  on the end of his  tail and his  head and he has a  MASSIVE fin.  He is  a really  powerful taniwha and he stalks the ocean like a underwater predator.  He's also got  really razor sharp teeth that can bite through steel !  My taniwha is hōhā and he do