persuasive writing- why should we fix our feld

We have been having a go at writing a piece of persuasive writing. Here is my piece of writing  about why we should fix our field.  

Title A Short Statement about the topic. eg. ‘Rugby League Is A Great Sport’	Save Our Field !!!!!!!
Overview/ Statement of position A brief statement of your view about the topic.  What you believe or want to argue.	I strongly advise that we need  to get the field back we would not get fit and we need to train for sport and also do  cross country.  Most of the space in our school is used for the feld.
Series of Arguments Reasons Your points supporting your view about the topic.  Your arguments to support your statement and information to support these arguments. Remember -argument -supporting detail, reasons, examples	secondly it is constantly boggy a lot of the time it was out of use. We should make use of all our sports equipment and the money is going to waste we use our money to pay for bus trips camps etc we could fundraise for the field.
	Thirdly we do lots of special events like the hangi but when the field is to wet and damp we can’t do special events on the field we need our field back urgently.
	finally we could make use of all of the sports equipment and most of the money is going to waste a large part of the school is also going to waste.  MAKE OUR FIELD GREAT AGAIN !!! 😃😀😃😀😃😀
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